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hear the rain radiating from rocks sub rosa.
we percolate unspoken words, unwritten truths,

condensed particles of what could be
rolling off intangibles, but not the tongue
made of roses. we are playing the rain
over susceptible skin and i am fading

through your stomata. enfold me in your petals
before i evaporate away from you.

i am transpiring through leaf-lined avenues
to weight the air with leaden cloud ready to weep
at the pressure of lips, the press of hands enfolded.

your slightest breath hints at a heat wave;
i can't handle your humidity. everything you
are to me is soaking through my bones and
i am helplessly, hopelessly wanting.
©2008-2009 ~Keraness
:iconkeraness:

Author's Comments

:iconkeraness: & :iconprairiedaisy:

=prairiedaisy wrote lines 1, 2, 5, 6, 9, 10, 11, 14, and 15. I wrote the rest. :)

Petrichor (from Greek petros, "stone" + ichor) is the name of the scent of rain on dry earth.

1/5/09: ...:faint:

I'm at a loss for words...from myself and Wendy, thank you so much for the DD, `GaioumonBatou and ^LadyLincoln. I am so happy to share this feature with such an amazing friend and poet, and I'm sure I speak for both of us when I say I'm grateful that we can inspire you, the reader.

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-01-05

There are such classically beautiful poems written, such as petrichor by =Keraness and =prairiedaisy. It has so much in-depth beauty, detail and several lovely metaphors. A memorable gem with such lines as 'i am transpiring through leaf-lined avenues, to weight the air with leaden cloud ready to weep, at the pressure of lips, the press of hands enfolded,' Really speak for themselves, so do go enjoy this collaborate effort, it is well worth it! (Suggested by `GaioumonBatou and Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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:iconr-mitchell:
i commented on prairiedaisy's, but i figure the credit should be equally split :) i really like this piece, it's beautiful.

"Petrichor (from Greek petros, "stone" + ichor) is the name of the scent of rain on dry earth."

that is the best scent in the world. well done to the greeks for having a word to describe it.
:iconkeraness:
Thank you so much. :D

I love it, too. They came up with such a pretty word for it.
:iconabandonedangel:
"enfold me in your petals/before i evaporate away from you."

omg. *melts* absolutely gorgeous metaphor. :heart:

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What if I'm the kindest demon? Something you may not believe in.
:iconb1gfan:
magical and wonderful as a collaboration can get! :)
:iconaqua-rat:
I never knew before that there was a word to describe that wonderful smell!
Beautifully luscious. The words seem to roll off the tongue. Very sensual and full of sense imagery.
'hands enfolded' mirrors the picture of leaves and petals.
A really successful collaboration.

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THIS IS THE GATE OF HEAVEN. ENTER YE ALL BY THIS DOOR. (This door is kept locked because of the draught - please use side door.)
:iconkeraness:
Thank you so much. :D
:iconkeraness:
From both of us, thank you! :)
:iconkeraness:
I didn't either, until *prairiedaisy sent me a note with her ideas for a prompt. :)

Thank you so much, from both of us. :thanks: :heart:
:iconabandonedangel:
You're quite welcome! :heart: :rose:

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What if I'm the kindest demon? Something you may not believe in.
:iconcynicalxpoet:
As I told prairiedaisy, this reads like a music video, which is really awesome.

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